Second Rough Draft

After going to TJ's on Thursday night, I turned in my second rough draft of my research paper on Friday. I edited the conclusion and tried to make the topic sentences more focused, instead of broad. I also added some more information about the zoo, as well as a story about Rollins students staying in the Langford during the 1980s. I tried to eliminate passive sentences throughout my paper, as well. Overall, I was pleased with the quality of my paper by the time I turned it in and I'm quite confident that my second rough draft is better than my first rough draft.